Sentence Revisions
Re-read the paragraph you wrote for the previous assignment. Your job is to select two sentences to make better by rewriting them. Copy and paste these two sentences below your original paragraph.
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"Judges are just as important as contestants. Without reliable, trustworthy judges, the results of a competition become invalid. However, the question of who should be the judge of skateboarding competitions should only be answered when the type of skateboarding competition has been decided on. There is a large difference between a local competition at a community school, and a worldwide professional competition. If the competition is a local one, it should be judged by the adults who mentor the competitors: the skateboarding coach, athletic director, other sports coaches, or sports-savvy teachers. This is in part because there are no people more qualified in the community to act as judge - not many professional skateboarders can be found to judge a small-town competition."
- However, the question of who should be the judge of skateboarding competitions should only be answered when the type of skateboarding competition has been decided on.
- This is in part because there are no people more qualified in the community to act as judge - not many professional skateboarders can be found to judge a small-town competition.
"Judges are just as important as contestants. Without reliable, trustworthy judges, the results of a competition become invalid. However, the question of who should be the judge of skateboarding competitions should only be answered when the type of skateboarding competition has been decided on. There is a large difference between a local competition at a community school, and a worldwide professional competition. If the competition is a local one, it should be judged by the adults who mentor the competitors: the skateboarding coach, athletic director, other sports coaches, or sports-savvy teachers. This is in part because there are no people more qualified in the community to act as judge - not many professional skateboarders can be found to judge a small-town competition."
- However, the question of who should be the judge of skateboarding competitions should only be answered when the type of skateboarding competition has been decided on. -> The type of judge should match the type of competition.
- This is in part because there are no people more qualified in the community to act as judge - not many professional skateboarders can be found to judge a small-town competition. -> These are the most qualified people in the community to judge a skateboarding competition, because it is unlikely that professional skateboarders will be able to attend a local competition.
What's DUE on Wednesday (August 26)?
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- Your original paragraph of writing based on one of the questions you wrote.
- Two sentence revisions.
- Optional: do extra revision and editing to your paragraph, and you are eligible for an "4/A" on this assignment.